Critique Welcomed Newport Beach Pier

[Brian Moore]

Olympus XA3 and Kodak Tr-X processed in Rodinal.

 

[Pete Askew]

Another fine composition Brian. Love the way the wave leads you to the people and then the pier beyond. The only thing I find slight distracting are the white clouds behind the palms. They keep drawing my eye and I'd be tempted to burn the in a bit. What do you think?

 

[Rob MacKillop]

I live the guy emerging from the sea onto new-found land...the palm trees add to a sense of being washed up on an island.

 

[Ivar Dahl-Larsen]

I like it very much except the the image is in two equal halfs. One thing one should try to avoid is to place the horizon in the middle of the image. Either 3/4 up or down would be better and here I would have kept the foreground and cut down on the sky, apart from that, everything is very good.

 

[Brian Moore]

Another fine composition Brian. Love the way the wave leads you to the people and then the pier beyond. The only thing I find slight distracting are the white clouds behind the palms. They keep drawing my eye and I'd be tempted to burn the in a bit. What do you think?

Thanks Pete. I hadn't actually noticed those white clouds behind the trees. You may be right. I may try reducing their brightness.

I live the guy emerging from the sea onto new-found land...the palm trees add to a sense of being washed up on an island.

Thanks Rob. Much appreciated.

I like it very much except the the image is in two equal halfs. One thing one should try to avoid is to place the horizon in the middle of the image. Either 3/4 up or down would be better and here I would have kept the foreground and cut down on the sky, apart from that, everything is very good.

Thanks Ivar. Your point is well-taken. However, I don't thing the horizon is quite in the center of the image. Also, when I composed the shot I wanted the foreground to be prominent because I liked how the waves led to the pier and I wanted to place some emphasis there. Nevertheless, thanks for your comments Ivar.

 

[Ivar Dahl-Larsen]

Thanks Pete. I hadn't actually noticed those white clouds behind the trees. You may be right. I may try reducing their brightness.


Thanks Rob. Much appreciated.


Thanks Ivar. Your point is well-taken. However, I don't thing the horizon is quite in the center of the image. Also, when I composed the shot I wanted the foreground to be prominent because I liked how the waves led to the pier and I wanted to place some emphasis there. Nevertheless, thanks for your comments Ivar.

You are right of course in regard to the middle, but all the same

 

[Julian de'Courcy]

Excellent Brian. The things I like about this are, the clarity of definitions between the sea the sky , the lines of the waves, the peir and trees and of course that it is film. I wont mention the spot on hoziron

 

[Brian Moore]

Excellent Brian. The things I like about this are, the clarity of definitions between the sea the sky , the lines of the waves, the peir and trees and of course that it is film. I wont mention the spot on hoziron

Thank you very much Julian. By the way, what's a "hoziron?" (It sounds similar to horizon but I know you are smart and would never mention that word lest those vile vile people, the Horizon Police, latch onto this posting. Please note, but do not say anything please, that a certain person who has posted previously in this thread--initials "PA"--serves as Chief Superintendent and High Chieftan of that dreadful dreadful race of people.)

 

[Pete Askew]

And, senior prosecutor with the missing comma squad!

 

[Julian de'Courcy]

Thank you very much Julian. By the way, what's a "hoziron?" (It sounds similar to horizon but I know you are smart and would never mention that word lest those vile vile people, the Horizon Police, latch onto this posting. Please note, but do not say anything please, that a certain person who has posted previously in this thread--initials "PA"--serves as Chief Superintendent and High Chieftan of that dreadful dreadful race of people.)

Not to worry Brian I used invisible ink on that bit that mentioned the thing about being level, no one else can see it

 

[Paul Lange]

I like the tones and sense of movement in this, Brian. Also, I thought the spot was a kite, which obviously it is.

 

[Pete Askew]

I understand it is still under investigation!

 

[Brian Moore]

And, senior prosecutor with the missing comma squad!

Cheeky, bugger!

I like the tones and sense of movement in this, Brian. Also, I thought the spot was a kite, which obviously it is.

Thank you Paul! Kite! Yes,...er, definitely a kite.

I understand it is still under investigation!

Nope! Kite! Definitely, kite!

 

[Pete Askew]

Making up the quota I see.