Critique Welcomed Cousins dressing up

[Tim Pindar]

From a day out today at Upton House, a National Trust place near Banbury. All taken on my iPhone 4S and treated in LR3 (NOT Instagram!).

The light was great.

Looking for the vintage feel obviously, but not sure I've got the vignette quite right yet...? Would a white vignette work better?

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Cousins, eh? Beautiful girls, with great smiles. Looks like a fun time was had by all. Very impressed with the photies!

 

[Tim Pindar]

One is my daughter, the other two my nieces, over from the USA.

 

[Chris Dodkin]

Damn fine shots - the fact that these are iPhone shots is amazing!

 

[Pete Askew]

What a great series of shots Tim. And the PP works well. I guess a negative vignette would suit the old photo style but I prefer the darkening you've used (although it might be a wee bit heavy). The last is my favourite and it is a wonderful portrait. How about losing a little bit from the top though?

 

[Tim Pindar]

Thanks Pete, revised versions below. I'm happier with a softer vignette and a couple of closer crops.

 

[Pete Askew]

Lovely stuff indeed. I bet they are on a few Facebook pages by now!

 

[Tim Pindar]

Yep, one's even a FB profile picture with 30-odd "likes"!

Of course they are the old versions. Can't be bothered to update the FB versions as the subjects won't notice the difference!