Critique Welcomed Musings February Feat. Chris Dodkin

[Davie Hudson]

http://issuu.com/daviehudson/docs/feb_musings_

 

[Dan Cattermole]

Brilliant, Davie.

I NEED to know where you got that coat from..... It's nothing short of epic!!

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Very nice, Davie! All the photography is superb, and I enjoyed reading the text - I've still to read the vinyl interview. Looking forward to that.

I don't know how perfect you want these eBooks to be, so I'm not sure if I should mention that you need a proofreader - your intro, especially. And I'm not sure if you chose the best phrase when you said you were on the road looking for deer, and it was a bit "hit or miss"... But just tell me where to go, if you want! Otherwise, I think it is a brilliant way to present your photos!

And the boy, Dodkin, does it again. Stunning contribution!

 

[Davie Hudson]

I'm quite happy to have the intro pointed out Rob ... what did I miss? The coat Dan is unfortunately a vintage Pendleton and long since been deleted from the pendleton catalogue

 

[Davie Hudson]

Oh and if it's a grammar situation i don't want to know lolol

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Sorry, not the Intro. It's the page where you describe your one day. Now, seen as you've asked:

A couple of times you have i instead of I - but some people choose to do that.

Paragraph 2: comma after 8.30. Capital T on "there" after "yucky".

Paragraph 3: "an" instead of "a all encompassing". I don't know about mentioning some of the grammar, because you have opted for a chatty tone. "That" instead of "than" - "deer than roam". I'd have a full stop after "parts of the road", but if not, there should at least be a comma.

Anyway, you get the idea.

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Oops, just saw your grammar comment!

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Most people couldn't give a damn, but my wife does this for a living (well, used to) and has drummed it into me!

 

[Davie Hudson]

Most people couldn't give a damn, but my wife does this for a living (well, used to) and has drummed it into me!

I know a lot of people who do Rob, I have a few teachers as friends and I annoy them greatly

 

[Rob MacKillop]

All part of your charm, young man

 

[Hamish Gill]

You know that Dodkin is a fraud right? It's all digital, he just takes photos of film cameras and blags the rest ...

 

[Rob MacKillop]

I knew it!!!

 

[Davie Hudson]

You know that Dodkin is a fraud right? It's all digital, he just takes photos of film cameras and blags the rest ...

They are really nice photos though

 

[Hamish Gill]

No excuse

 

[Davie Hudson]

Sorry, not the Intro. It's the page where you describe your one day. Now, seen as you've asked:

A couple of times you have i instead of I - but some people choose to do that.

Paragraph 2: comma after 8.30. Capital T on "there" after "yucky".

Paragraph 3: "an" instead of "a all encompassing". I don't know about mentioning some of the grammar, because you have opted for a chatty tone. "That" instead of "than" - "deer than roam". I'd have a full stop after "parts of the road", but if not, there should at least be a comma.

Anyway, you get the idea.

The i's bother me, i thought i'd fixed that

 

[Pete Askew]

Another fabulous edition Davie. I enjoyed that. Thanks.

 

[Davie Hudson]

Thanks Pete, it's doing a great job of keeping me occupied though in saying that I'm doing a collaboration on a Scottish magazine and a one off panorama one

 

[Pete Askew]

Sounds good.

 

[Chris Dodkin]

You know that Dodkin is a fraud right? It's all digital, he just takes photos of film cameras and blags the rest ...

NIK Analog FX - nod's as good as a wink to a blind bat!

 

[Chris Dodkin]

Looking great Davie - you're an inspiration