Critique Welcomed Right in ya grill.

[Dan Cattermole]

P4180499-3 by dajoolzcat, on Flickr


P4180520-3 by dajoolzcat, on Flickr

Thanks for looking

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Here's my critique: these are brilliant!

 

[Dan Cattermole]

Thanks rob. A part of my 'Askew' influence with the PP.
I used my home made flash diffuser I made out of a lamp shade and took these shots with a 28mm f/2.8 (@f/4) OM lens at 0.3 meters (in ya face distance) lol. And the diffuser was a fingers length from their forehead to give it that down light effect I was after.
They soon got annoyed with it

 

[Pete Askew]

Not much to critique here Dan - but I will anyway!!

First one is pretty well spot on I would say. Placement, tones etc great. All it needs is a fine hairline frame in a dark tone selected from the image and it is complete I think. The second doesn't work as well I think. If the eyes were straight it would be better but I'm finding it hard to find the focal point in the image and my eyes are just wandering around it.

 

[Brodie Jackson]

wooow! I really really love these, Dan!

 

[Dan Cattermole]

Thanks Brodie,

Pete, I see exactly what you mean.
She had something in her hands and looking at it which is not visable, hence the almost crossed eye look.
But I cannot fault that critique at all.
I was going to start a new thread for this shot, but seeing as we're on the same subject.
What do you think about this one instead?

 

[Pete Askew]

I like that a lot more although the same PP would be nice. Ideally a bit more of her right eye would be in but I think it still works. It might be nice to soften that area on her skin if you can though.

 

[adam hoskins]

Well apart from the hatred I have for you right now, the first two I like a lot. Only critique I would say and at a push I would of popped the eyes a touch and dodged them a bit, that's my pref though. Third one is slightly lost for me with the eye just out of the frame.

 

[adrian jordin]

That second picture looks incrediably doll like...

In fact, you could try cropping even more tightly, (lose the hair, basically), and then applying a filter to really soften the skin tones.
Yes, its artificial but the effect is worth checking out...

 

[Darren Turner]

brilliant set DD, i love the first 2 the angles, detail and up close is really dam good and still loving the PP what ever you have done.....lol........!! if i tried something similar i would be well chuffed with these.

that last one you posted, the left eye is the bit i dont like. 2 eyes are great, 1 eye is great, 1 eye in 1 eye out of focus is great, but the half an eye, i dont think works.

Daz

 

[Paul Lange]

It's odd as I am not sure about the 1st and 3rd but really like the 2nd. It is a much more challenging image and therefore more interesting to me. It also has something that I have a particular interest in at the moment. There's a strange mix of sentimentality and being sinister.

 

[Chris Dodkin]

I think because of the close proximity, you could read #2 and #3 as sinister in some way - Midwich Cuckoos kind of sinister.

However - you can also look at all three as intimate family shots - with the young age of the subjects and the close proximity really enhancing the eye size, and hence the impact (I use this myself when I shoot my grandkids)

The detail in the eye in #3 is just stunning - and worth a shot of it's own at some point

 

[Dan Cattermole]

Thanks ever so much guys and gals.
There's a whole bunch mixed yet very good critique, advice and apreciation to take on ship there from all.

 

[Ronald Atchley]

My word these are well done . The second ( or lower ) of the first two
is absolutely riveting ! Only sugestion for it is to hang it somewhere
prominent. The last one doesn't work for me anywhere near as well.
Ron

 

[Dan Cattermole]

Thank you Ron.