Critique Welcomed John Boats

Ronald Atchley

Ronald Atchley

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It is a great failing of mine to overwork an image but , in this
case , it seemed to do less harm. These were awaiting some
young lady or man to paddle them slowly around the lake at
David Crockett State Park in Southern Tennessee. What would
I have given for a young person sitting barefooted on the end
of the dock with a fishing pole and straw hat :)
Ron


235B&WBoats by Ronatch, on Flickr
 
I love the way my eye initially took in the boats and the dock, and the liquidity of the water in the foreground, and then I saw the black depths in the background - fabulous!
 
Thanks Chris , Rob , and Zooey :)
I'm working on a more "real" version just to see if
I can do it but this verision is very close to what I
had in mind when I first saw the boats.
Thanks again :)
Ron
 
I do like this Ron, very painterly. And the water in the foreground is superb. There is a slight optical illusion of a tilt to the left though. I suspect it is caused by the poles not being vertical even though the natural horizon appears to be the jetty.

Maybe you can get an inflatable model a bit like Chris' inflatable lifeguard station. Mmm, inflatable model, might be misconstrued so maybe not!! ;)
 
Ahhhh ! There's nothing quite like one of those high end
inflatable models :)
Really appreciate your coment and suggestion. Will try skew on the
vertical poles. I've been chastised many many times for my painterly
work but sometimes it appeals to me. I think this has potential for a
"normal" version if I can ever get time to work on it.
Thanks again.
Ron
 
Nothing wrong with painterly effect in my book. I'm quite partial to the Rough Pastels filter in PS myself. And when you think of 'traditional' methods such as Bromoil and Gum-Bichromate they cannot help but be anything but painterly. After all, you apply them with a brush!! :)
 
Thanks Pete, Nice to hear. Obviously it's not for everything
but in some cases it works very well. Still want to try it "normal"
to see if I can get the texture of the wood and metal to feel
right.
Thanks again :)
Ron
 
I like this alot. I really like the strong contrasts in this! it's almost a little abstract in the background until you notice the tones of the deeper shades & blacks, then working your way forward there's some lovely tone & texture right through to the foreground ripples.

I do feel a slight pull to the left, though. The horizontal lines of the boards on the jetty from the left do look level & as Pete points out perhaps it's just an illusion from the vertical hand rails. Perhaps a little straightening crop of a degree or two will make the image even stronger. Lovely image though.
 
Thanks Alfie :)
I do see what you're talking about in the lean or pull to the left.
Like I mentioned to Pete, I'm reworking this to try a more "natural"
edit. I'll try to change the rotation of the crop but I may have to
try something with the vertical poles also ??
Thanks again :)
Ron
 
It will be interesting to see what you come up with, Ron. I really like the "painter" type style in this image, so it will be interesting to see what a more "natural" edit does for the image. Lovely capture to work with either way!
 
Thanks again Alfie. Like I mentioned , I've been chastised many times
for my painterly B&W work. It is refreshing to hear from someone who
is not critical of or offended by it :)
I just want to see if I can pull a little more texture out of the wood and
give the metal of the boats a little more "feel".
Thanks again. Appreciated.
Ron
 
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