Laurence Cremetti
Well-Known Member
Neurosis? Me?
Please be ultra critical, evil.... Shred these images, please!!!
Please be ultra critical, evil.... Shred these images, please!!!
Savage this!! (Please).
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Allan Batchelor
Well-Known Member
Im no expert but i think the dove box could maybe do with a little more black on the bottom edge in the crop.
Picture for decanter/port looks pretty good to me but since you have a bottle of port in picture might be an idea to change wording a little "decanters are normally used as serving vessels for" why not just say port or similar spirits as you cover the wine later with the carafe.
Picture for decanter/port looks pretty good to me but since you have a bottle of port in picture might be an idea to change wording a little "decanters are normally used as serving vessels for" why not just say port or similar spirits as you cover the wine later with the carafe.
Laurence Cremetti
Well-Known Member
Thank you Allan, that's it, go for it!
It almost pains me to be able to reply with a reason for the wording, but it's just a cut 'n' paste, you see. I didn't write that one on the Port. I did write the other, though...........
Thank you!!!!!
It almost pains me to be able to reply with a reason for the wording, but it's just a cut 'n' paste, you see. I didn't write that one on the Port. I did write the other, though...........
Thank you!!!!!
adrian jordin
Well-Known Member
Purely personal preferences but...
For the first one, since you start talking about a decanter it should be at the foreground rather than the wine glass.
There's also a bit too much space to the left of the text, IMO.
For the second, you need a little bit more space to the left of the box, its looking a little cramped...
The second part of the text is good, but you might look at changing the layout.. eg
A positively
precious
parade of
purity.
For the first one, since you start talking about a decanter it should be at the foreground rather than the wine glass.
There's also a bit too much space to the left of the text, IMO.
For the second, you need a little bit more space to the left of the box, its looking a little cramped...
The second part of the text is good, but you might look at changing the layout.. eg
A positively
precious
parade of
purity.
Darren Bradley
Well-Known Member
OK, you asked for it!
I know the words are there more as a placeholder than anything else, but I was also going to say that if your main focus is the decanter, it should be in front. Also, the background is just a bit too busy and distracting for my taste... you notice it more than one probably should want to.
For the Dove box, it's cropped too tight on the bottom and the left, as Adrian and Allan already pointed out. Also, the box is crumpled a bit on the top. The lighting emphasizes that irregularity on the lid with the glare.
I know the words are there more as a placeholder than anything else, but I was also going to say that if your main focus is the decanter, it should be in front. Also, the background is just a bit too busy and distracting for my taste... you notice it more than one probably should want to.
For the Dove box, it's cropped too tight on the bottom and the left, as Adrian and Allan already pointed out. Also, the box is crumpled a bit on the top. The lighting emphasizes that irregularity on the lid with the glare.
Hamish Gill
Tech Support (and Marketing)
Haha Laurence you sound like a masochist!!
But since you ask...
I'm going to ignore the placeholder text, although I agree with the sentiments relating to it!
My issue with the fisrt one is more the "feel" than anything else ... It feels bit dated! It's a bit late ninetys boom luxury to me, a bit man climbing through a window with a box of milk tray' cheesy
I know you are just experimenting, but of you were thinking of building a portfolio of images to use to market your self I would be thinking about playing on contemporary trends!
A decanter plays to much on the luxury for today's markets, if for example I were marketing port (I know that's not nessasarily what your doing) I would look at maybe playing on the rustic element! Maybe having it say on a rustic wooden table with a hint of wooden crate or barrel in the background, maybe a hint of Portuguese writing showing!
Luxury doesn't sell so well these days, but that's not to say quality doesn't! Somthing that shows the quality routes of the port would appeal to a marketer much better!
As for the dove one! Yeah, framing Is too tight, but also the box pointing out of the frame is a miss... I know it's a bit daft to personify a box, but it looks nonchalant, it should look welcoming... Pointing it into the frame would help with this!
But since you ask...
I'm going to ignore the placeholder text, although I agree with the sentiments relating to it!
My issue with the fisrt one is more the "feel" than anything else ... It feels bit dated! It's a bit late ninetys boom luxury to me, a bit man climbing through a window with a box of milk tray' cheesy
I know you are just experimenting, but of you were thinking of building a portfolio of images to use to market your self I would be thinking about playing on contemporary trends!
A decanter plays to much on the luxury for today's markets, if for example I were marketing port (I know that's not nessasarily what your doing) I would look at maybe playing on the rustic element! Maybe having it say on a rustic wooden table with a hint of wooden crate or barrel in the background, maybe a hint of Portuguese writing showing!
Luxury doesn't sell so well these days, but that's not to say quality doesn't! Somthing that shows the quality routes of the port would appeal to a marketer much better!
As for the dove one! Yeah, framing Is too tight, but also the box pointing out of the frame is a miss... I know it's a bit daft to personify a box, but it looks nonchalant, it should look welcoming... Pointing it into the frame would help with this!
Paul Lange
Moderator
I won't reiterate what the others have said as I imagine you have got the message by now. The focus, colours, light and DOF are really nice. However, the reflections on the port bottle and the glass don't look good to me. I've not done product photography at all but I believe that you need a strip softbox or to put your square softbox closer and mask it with some blackout material to make it a strip light. The label on the bottle is pealed up in one corner and has some nicks in the bottom of it. The dove box looks a little tatty. Are you able to cut the lid and bottom of the box off so that you get a nice straight clean edge on the top and bottom?
Chris Dodkin
West Coast Correspondent
From a purely technical point of view, the Port bottle is leaning (very slightly) to the left - easy fix on this one!
Laurence Cremetti
Well-Known Member
This is great!! Thank you very much, guys! If anything else springs to mind, please post it. You can't upset me until I think I'm PERFECT, and only then will I get upset. Watch out, 'cos it'll be a l-o-n-g wait for that day!!
Many thanks.
Many thanks.
Laurence Cremetti
Well-Known Member
Well, thought I'd look at changing the Dove image..... Now I have, I once again find myself in the "is that better" position. Maybe it is, maybe it isnt....
The crumpled-ness isnt addressed, but I think the rest is.
What do you think, folks?
The crumpled-ness isnt addressed, but I think the rest is.
What do you think, folks?
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