Critique Welcomed That 'just So' Look

[Dave Young]

Here's a recent pic of my Daughter that I've been playing with in LR trying to get that 'just so' B&W vibe with... what do you think?


Ebban_B&W by mrdaveyoung, on Flickr

 

[Dan Cattermole]

I think it's blooming marvellous!

 

[Keith Hollister]

Great pose, Dave. Two issues on the processing for me -

1. Her skin looks overly smoothed to me. There is no discernible shape to the upper part of her nose and where it transitions into her forehead. And that, in turn really accentuates the crease in her face on her left side which is distracting because it takes a moment to register what it is. The featureless look to the skin/face looks out of place against the texture and detail of the hat and hair. The eyebrows and eyes are quite contrasty and detailed, which also look odd popping out of the completely smooth face.
2. I would try and get a little more tonal separation between the left side of her face and the hand/arm/whatever she is leaning on. It merges into her face above the cheekbone which looks a little odd to me.

I like the tones on the clothing on the right side of the frame, and like the "high key" look against the black background.

Just my opinions, of course.