Critique Required The Smell Of 2014

[Peter Blake]

opinions please: should the dad and son have been the point of focus rather than the incense?

I'm thinking I can get away with this under the guise of 'heat haze' …… but could probably reshoot something very similar

 

[Brian Moore]

If it were mine I would have preferred the the child's face be in focus, Peter. Even so, it's a very interesting image.

 

[Rob MacKillop]

Yes, it's almost a great picture. Worth hanging around that place to see what else you can capture. Very good, though.

 

[Rense Haveman]

Agree with Brian on the focus. I like it though!!

 

[Glenn Clabo]

I think it's an intriguing shot as is...but if you could get the boys face brighter...focus isn't absolutely required imho...and chop out the right side it would be even better.

 

[Chris Dodkin]

Peter - love the atmosphere and the use of B&W

I think the lighting is a little challenging - especially the child's face as mentioned, but I do love the backlit smoke - that really sets the tone

Well worth exploring more if you can - I think there's a lot of opportunity in this location based on this first pass

 

[Peter Blake]

how about this?

tighter and dodged but now I see his little ski tan lines. which make me prefer the darker face???

 

[Chris Dodkin]

I like that tighter crop much better - I think the framing in the right was throwing the feel of the image

 

[Glenn Clabo]

Much better comp...and I like the improvement in the little boys face. All in all...vast improvement.

 

[Paul Lange]

That is much better and I think it was worth investing some additional time on this image. I don't know what other people think, the hand and arm do bother me a little bit but I can't say why. Overall though, I do like it, I love the atmosphere.

 

[Pete Askew]

I like the tighter crop more too and it makes the focus on the steam / smoke work better as well. I like this.